thenicochan: {...} from Hanna is Not a Boy's Name (UtenaAnthykiss)
thenicochan ([personal profile] thenicochan) wrote in [community profile] rose_in_winter 2016-06-15 12:29 pm (UTC)

Excellent. I like your Yukiko voice, and the interactions between the two ladies has the same familiar-vaguely-romantic feel as if lifted directly from the game. I really enjoyed the dialogue as a whole, and especially enjoyed the lines from "The phone chirped..." to "See you at school." It was so simply presented, but I felt the edge of triumph between our characters (and the insinuation that Rise was probably huddled in front of her TV, just as intent on not letting her fear overtake her as these two) that really made the whole piece work for me.


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